On the off chance that you haven't started coloring this yet, I would make the hair that is extending out appear more spread out, as opposed to torn black tape, hah. Kinda makes it look like she has a weird hair trim.Otherwise this is looking really great. I really love the level of detail in the bedsheets, they actually look like someone is laying in them.As for her face, I think in the second one you added the bridge of her nose, making her appear more real. Your shadows were also softer in the first, and you (maybe intentionally) neglected to add the shadow around her cheek bone area in the second. Her eyes are also more pronounced in the second.Okay, bye! :D
Thank you sir. Some real criticism for once. Well, you're the second, but I'll toss you the bone on this one.